请帮忙看看这段英语作文有什么语法错误的地方

Question

我自己写的英语作文，想练习练习，没有老师给我修改，所以想请帮帮忙。如下：
In our life, we may have many experiences. They affect our fellings often.They can make us happy or sad.The bad feeling is bad for our health.So we must stay in good spirits.Here are some suggestions:

1.I like music a lot.So I think music can make me happy again.

2.Talk with friends is a useful idea.You can get some help from them.

3.I will feel happy when I wear my favorite clothes.I think you will also feel happy when you wear your favorite clothes.

4.Maybe sleep can change our feelings.If we sleep well, we will feel happy when we get up.

Answer 1

第一行 have中文化了 改成 we may experience many things会生动得多 fellings 首先不可数 不加s 另外，改成emotion更恰当，FEEL表示感受，不是你所认为的感受的感受，emotion表示情感。can 去掉
第二行 must改成had better sipirit首先不加s，另外用在这也不对，这词意思精神，应该为mind,in good mind指保持好心情，这是习语，固定用法
不要总用I think，举个例子，第四行可以改成，I like music quite a lot, so I often enjoy myself with light music when I have some spare time, which always makes me fell relax and comfortebal after all day's hardwok.尽量用插入语和变换句式让你的表达变得丰富一些。

Answer 2

写的很好，没有错的。翻译是：
在我们的生活中，我们会有很多的经验。他们经常影响我们的感觉。他们可以让我们快乐或悲伤。坏的感觉对我们的健康是有害的。所以我们必须保持良好的精神。这里有一些建议：
1。我非常喜欢音乐。所以我觉得音乐能让我开心。
2。与朋友聊天是一个有用的想法。你可以从他们那里得到一些帮助。
3。我觉得快乐，当我穿上我最喜欢的衣服。我想你也会感到快乐，当你穿上你最喜欢的衣服。
4睡眠。也许能改变我们的心情。如果我们睡得好，我们就会感到高兴，当我们起床的时候。本回答被提问者和网友采纳

Answer 3

第一行：may不要，they  often  affect  our  ideas,make happy  and  sad.

第二行：is  bad  for  healthy.我个人觉得改成the  negative  attitude  is  bad  for  future.must  keep a  positive attitude.  some  advices:

I  like  music  very much,so去掉，make  me  fresh,again去掉

talk加ing  ,我个人会改成  talking with friends is  a good choice,we  can  get  some  useful  imformation  from  them.

if  i  am  wearing  my  favorite  clothes,i  will feel  happy,so  you can try it

feelings的S去掉，when we  sleep well,we  will feel  relax  and energetic after getting up

用形容词不要只懂用happy。

Answer 4

. 2.Talk with friends is a useful idea.You can get some help from them.这句中的“talk”应用“talking”

4.Maybe sleep can change our feelings.If we sleep well, we will feel happy when we get up.这句中的“sleep”应该为“sleeping”

我个人认为“So we must stay in good spirits.”这句中的“must”用“should”可能更好一些。

希望能帮到你！！！

Answer 5

we may have many experiences如果你是想说我们也许有许多经历，那就应该用maybe.
They affect our fellings often应该把often放在they之后。
So I think music can make me happy again.用again不知道你要表达什么。
Talk with friends is a useful idea应该用talking.
.I will feel happy 去掉will
Maybe sleep can change 用sleeping