第1个回答 2012-11-19
i was walking to home 错了，应该是i was walking home，home是副词，不加介词to
she looked at very poor错了，应该是 she looked very poor，look直接加形容词poor
she asked me ten yuan错了，应该是 she asked me for ten yuan ，ask for 固定搭配
she told to me 错了，应该是she told me ，tell直接加宾语或者that从句
she had alreadly had meal all day.错，按照你的翻译，应该是she did not have meal all day.
beacuse one thief to steal her all money 错，应该是beacuse a thief had stolden all her money
i saw the women asked ten yuan to other people错，应该是.i saw the women asked ten yuan from other people
one thief to steal her all money错，应该是one thief stoled her all money,
so i now she was a liar错，应该是so i know she was a liar
第2个回答 2012-11-19
Long long ago, I was a middle school student. One day, when I was walking home from school, suddenly I saw a women standing in front of me. She looked very poor. She told me that she was very hungry and did not have meals for a whole day, because a thief had stolen all her money. She asked me for ten yuan and I gave her ten yuan. But after ten minutes, I saw the women asking ten yuan from another man. She still told the man that a thief had stolen all her money. Finally, I realized that she was a liar.
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第3个回答 2012-11-19
long long ago,（i -要大写I） was a middle school student（, -应该用句号.) ( While -- 变为状语从句更好一些）(i = I) was walking to home from school（. --变逗号,) suddenly ( i= I) saw a women in front of me( ,=.) (she =She) looked (at 拿掉，才是“看起来”的意思,而 look at = 看着 ）very poor（, = .) ( she = She) asked me ( 加 for ） ten yuan（, = .）( she =She) told ( to =多余，拿掉）me she was very hungry. （she = She） had （not) alreadly had (any) meal (all 拿掉，变 the whole <the whole day =一整天) day（. = ,) beacuse one thief ( to 多余，拿掉) （ steal = had stolen) ( her all money = All her money). ( so i = So I ) gave ten yuan to her.( but =But) after ten minutes( . =，）（i =I） saw the women （asked = ask,因为see sb do sth,需要原型动词） hear ten yuan （to = from :是她从别人那儿要，不是她给别人） other people（, =.) ( she =She) still told that man( , =:) one thief ( to 多余，拿掉）（steal =had stolen) ( her all money = all her money) ( ，= 。）（so = So ）（ i =I ） now she was a liar.
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第4个回答 2012-11-19
Long long ago, I was a middle school student. One day, when I was walking home from school, suddenly I saw a women standing in front of me. She looked very poor. She told me that she was very hungry and did not have meals for a whole day, because a thief had stolen all her money. She asked me for ten yuan and I gave her ten yuan. But after ten minutes, I saw the women asking ten yuan from another man. She still told the man that a thief had stolen all her money. Finally, I realized that she was a liar.
第5个回答 2012-11-19
Several years ago, when I was a middle school student. I was walking home from school when I saw a woman in front of me. she lookd very poor. She asked me for ten yuan,she said she was very hungry and she had nothing for all day because a thief stole all her money.So I gave her ten yuan,but after ten minutes , I saw the woman asked another man for ten yuan once again,she also told the man what she told me!Then I knew she was a liar!