有问题啊 把那个after改成later 还有啊就是on December的on去掉，不要这个on ，，嗯还有就是send the photograph会更好更顺，另外 那个become familiar with you最好换掉 好奇怪哦这么说，你可以说很想和你交朋友之类的啊 I want to make company with you in haste
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第1个回答 2016-07-10
帮你精简了语义和用比较口语化的方式重排了一下.
Dear Amelita Kelm:
How are u!
I'm Zijia Teng(english name is Candy), a lovely and friendly chinese girl. My birthday is Dec 24th. And I like reading and taking photoes.
Well, I'm glad to meet u. So we can know each other more, and become more familiar with u later.
Btw, I've also sent u some of my photoes and my plane ticket.
Could u please have a check with them.
Hope to see u soon.
Yours sincerely,
Candy
Dear Amelita Kelm:
How are u!
I'm Zijia Teng(english name is Candy), a lovely and friendly chinese girl. My birthday is Dec 24th. And I like reading and taking photoes.
Well, I'm glad to meet u. So we can know each other more, and become more familiar with u later.
Btw, I've also sent u some of my photoes and my plane ticket.
Could u please have a check with them.
Hope to see u soon.
Yours sincerely,
Candy
第2个回答 2016-07-10
第四行，因为主语是I，用like就好。
倒数第二行，I send a picture of me就好。
机票好像叫air ticket。
倒数第二行，I send a picture of me就好。
机票好像叫air ticket。
第3个回答 2016-07-10
基本没有语法错误
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