哪位高手帮我看看哪里语法错误了，中文翻译成英语的

Question

然而，随着经历了更多有趣的事情，我发现，我所追求的是我的身心的提升，而不是一纸文凭。However, with more interesting things I experienced, I found that what should I go for is my improving of body and mind, not a college degree.

Answer 1

语法错误：1.what should I go for ——>what I should go for；
2. is my improving of body and mind-->is to improve my body and mind
修改译文：However, as my experience enriched with more interesting things, I began to realize that what I should go for is to improve my body and soul rather than to merely seek for a college diploma.

Answer 2

However,the more interesting things I am experiencing , the more I find out that my goal is not a diploma or a degree ,but the physical and mental improvement of myself .

Answer 3

However, the more interesting things I have experienced, the more I find out that what I should go for is the improvement of body and mind, not just a college degree.追问

追答

我觉得还可以，要不你再问问别人吧

Answer 4

我觉得你的汉语都有问题，可以说是经历了很多有趣的事情之后。然后翻译是，however,after experiencing so much funny things ,I find that what I pursue is mental and physical improvement.

Answer 5

is 改为was