BEC商务英语初级考试:书信写作模拟题
You are going to spend holidays in Hawaii in June. Suddenly you received a letter from an important customer,Mr. Elton Deland,who will arrive on 25th June and discuss the claim. You have to delay the trip till July.
Write a short message to Ms. Anne Folster, your secretary.
. Explain Why you postpone your trip.
. Mention the date when Mr. Elton Deland will arrive.
. Ask her to arrange your meeting.
. Write 30-40words on your Answer Sheet.
提示:
一般不用信头称呼的形式,也不采用在结尾处署上写信人的名字的方式,而是在备忘录的开头处写明收信人To________,在结尾处写明具体的写信人From___________以及主题:Re:__________ 或Subject:____________。例如:
To: Head Office staff
From: Tom Beck
I have the pleasure of announcing that Ms Sally Jolie has been appointed as the new Sales Manager at Head Office. Ms Jolie is due to join us on Monday 15th. Please give her a friendly welcome when she starts work.
Thank you.
参考答案:
To : Ms. Anne Folster
From:
I have to delay my trip to Hawaii till July,as Mr. Flton Deland will arrive in London on 25th June and discuss the claim face to face. Please arrange our meeting on 26th June.
PART ONE
You have been informed that next Wednesday your company's computer system will be closed down so that improvements can be made.
Write an email to all staff in your department:
a.saying what time on Wednesday the system will be closed down
b.suggesting how staff should prepare for this
c.saying how the system will be better after the improvements
Write 40--50 words
学生作文:
From: Jenny Xu
To: All Staff
Date: 5 April 2009
Subject: Computer System
I want to tell you that our Intranet based on Linux will be closed next Wednesday at 10 o'clock.. I want to suggesting that you should save all your important documents. The computer system will be faster because we will use a newer SAP system. The new system is according to ISO900 and we will benefit from that.
作文解析:
BEC作文解答时,审题非常重要。题目中给出的要求就好比是解代数题中已知条件,都要用到。小作文处理的时候,大家不妨可以把每一个已知条件扩写成一句句子,同时兼顾句子之间的连接。
通常学生犯的错误是:
1. 漏掉题中给出的已知条件。
2. 给出的已知条件没有表达清楚,用词过于口语化,没有条理,暴露出语言功底薄弱。
3. 切忌过于花哨的发挥,多说多错。
这篇学生的作品是比较典型的案例。作者有一定的英语表达能力和工作经验,但文章中所暴露出来的不足也是明显的。写作不能从细处下笔,而是先要搭建框架。
以这篇习文为例,作者在具体语言的表达的.雕琢上可圈可点,比如说第一个句子中based on引导的过去分词做后置定语,但是显而忘记了这篇文章的主要目的,那就是通知同事公司电脑系统要升级,但update这个词始终没有在文章中出现,因此读下来以后,可能同事还不是非常清楚,为什么computer system will be closed down, 尽管后面提到了improvement,总让人觉得有些如鲠在咽,言之不尽;因此,思路不清晰是这篇习文最大的问题。
此外,本文还有以下一些问题:
1. 有些用词过于口语化,比如说,文章开头, I want to tell you, 文中you should save这样的用语;
2. 建议Linux, 将SAP, ISO900等唬人术语统统除去,诚然BEC涉及到基本的商务知识,但是真正考核的还是语言功底,语用能力;商务知识好比是盖浇饭里面的小炒而已。
3.里面还有一个明显的语法错误,I want to suggesting….,当然阅卷者不会刻意去搜寻语法错误,而是综合考量语法得分,但由于小作文篇幅较短,那么这个错误就显得非常明显。
范文:
Please be informed that our computer system will be closed next Wednesday at 12 o'clock for system upgrade. The closure will last for at least two hours. Make sure that you have saved all your documents before that time. The whole system will run on a new server, much faster than the current one.
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