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Question

With the development of technology, the Internet has become a significant part of human life and has been used to study, get information, entertainment and communicate. However, it also take a large number of negative impact on human life.

To begin with, although there are a lot of information in the internet, some fake and unreliable information are exsit which might mislead people to do incorrect things. For instance, people might shopping on internet, they know the goods only depend on the advertising and the description by the seller, and the advertising and the describe are also exaggerated or untruthfulness. People pay the money and wait for a little long time receipting a false or a bad quality goods eventually. An other example, additionally, is that the recruit of some company who will provide a job with high pays and comfortable work environment. When people prepare to work and arrive the site then find that is too worse to work with serious air or water pollution and unbelievable low pay which can not to be afford the essential life.

Furthermore, the internet also contains various information which are harmful to young people's mental health such as erotic film, violent word, drug information. Young people are too young to completely distinguish the right and the bad and to control themselves to refuse such trap. Most young people are addicted in those, finally, they are committed a crime destroying their own life, injuring their parents and friends, making an awful impact on society.

Last but not least, according to many survey people are spend vast time to surf the internet. As is know to us all, the computer could create some radio which is harmful to human's health lead to skin diseases and influence the metabolism of human. besides, it is also bad to eyes, the radiation might lead to a decline of eyesight.

Although the internet offers people with a lot of valuable information, and a lot of works can not run without internet as well as we can not deny the negative impact that come with the internet. People should used the internet validly and reasonably, concerning the valuable information and refuse the information which might impair our mental health. It is necessary to create a green and health environment of Internet it might meaningful for the future development of human society.

Answer 1

With the development of technology, the Internet has become a significant part of human life and has been used to study, get information, entertainment and communicate. However, it also take a huge negative impact on human life.

To begin with, although there are lot of information in the internet, some fake and unreliable information existing which might mislead people to do something wrong. For instance, people might shop on the internet as they know the goods selling only depends on how advertising is wonderful or not, which is exaggerated and untruthfulness. People pay money and wait for a little long time receipting a false or ropy goods eventually.

For another example, additionally, is that the recruit of some company who will provide a job with high pays and comfortable work environment. When people prepare to work and arrive then find that is too terrible to work with severe air and water pollution and such low income which cannot afford the essential life.

Furthermore, the internet also contains various information which are harmful to young people's mental health such as erotic film, violent word, drug information. Young people are too young to completely distinguish the right and the bad or avoid falling into a trap. Once they fall into the snare they may commit a crime destroying their life, injuring their parents and friends, making an adverse impact on society.

Last but not least, according to lot of survey, people spend vast time surfing the Internet. As is known to us, the computer can create much radiation, which is harmful to human's health leading to skin diseases and influence of the metabolism. Besides, it is also harmful to eyes for the radiation might lead to a decline of eyesight.

Although the internet offers people with a lot of valuable information, so many workers can't run without the internet as well as we can't ignore the infaust impact that come with the internet. People should make good use of the Internet validly and reasonably concerning the valuable information and ignore the information which might impair our mental health. It is necessary to create a green and health environment of Internet it might meaningful for the future development of human society.

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Answer 2

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