这是我写的一篇高考模拟作文,满分是30分,希望得到各位高手的批改。请帮我更正用错的词汇和语法并提供具体讲解和错误原因。
如果您对高考评分比较了解,更希望您能帮我估分!非常感谢。
题目:
最近有人提出取消春节联欢晚会,引起了一场争论,下列是各自的理由。请描述争论情况,谈谈自己看法。
支持取消:1.节目每年大同小异 2.其他娱乐方式很多,不必花那么多人力物力搞春晚
反对取消:1.春节联欢晚会是中国文化的一部分,是连接华人的纽带。2.没有春节联欢晚会,年轻人会出去娱乐;老年人被留在家会孤独。
我的作文:
Recently,some people come up with an idea that the Spring Festival Gala should be canceled which bring out a arguement.
People who agree with this idea hold that each year's performances in the Spring Festival Gala are similar. And nowadays,people have more ways to enjoy themselves.So there dosen't seem much point in spending much money and manpower holding the Spring Festival Gala.
However,a coin has two sides. Other people take an opposite side.They believe that the Spring Festival Gala is a part of chinese culture and a link between chinese.Without the Spring Festival Gala,yound people would rathar go out to have entertainment than stay at home.If so,the old should stay at home lonely.
In my opinion,the Spring Festival Gala shouldn't be canceled,for watching the Spring Festival Gala have already been a custom for a lot of chinese people.And it can deliver happiness to people all over the world.
Dear reader,what do you think about this idea?
非常感谢!!
好的追加!!
倒数第二段的第二行的have改为has 打错了。
回小不点0806:谢谢你的意见。但是,There dosen't seem much point in doing sth是我们高中课本上的原句。个人认为不存在不地道和不正确的问题。