英语作文修改一下 求你们了

There are a vast number of people like smoking. Not only the old, the adult, but also school students have been joined in smoking. However, smoking is harmful to one’s health, whether you are smoker or not. Therefore, many countries want to ban smoking in public. But in my opinion, smoking should not be banned in all public. I believe this for several reasons.
Although smoking is harmful to our body, it still has advantages for us. Now more and more pressure makes people depressing and nervous, and Cigarettes provide pleasure to smoker. Smoking is a good way to chase away pressure for someone. I do not think many non-smokers who like snacking, eating junk food or high calories food are healthier than chain-smokers. On the other hand, cigarettes also are useful when we involve in the society, since there are many smokers in Social Occasions. It is easier to talk to them with a cigarette in your hand. Everybody has the right to keep his or her habit. smoke is a usual habit for many people.
In “2007 Chinese finance” the writer states more than 20 percents of the Chinese annual financial revenue is supported by the cigarette-making company by paying the taxes. In fact, the cigarettes businesses become an important part of revenue of country. Therefore if we ban smoking in all public places, it must brings on many problems. I will give some examples. First, cigarette companies sell fewer produces, they have to reduce workers. Many people will lose their job, and that will create new social problem. Second, the country gets fewer tax from smoker, therefore the government does not have enough money to help poor people or do other important contributions and projects.
Finally, I want to say we can not ban smoking in all public places, since smoking is also has many advantages. My suggestion is smoking should be banned in dense places such like bus station, train station, supermarket and so on. And we should build more smoking room.

There are a vast number of smokers in all age brackets. Smoking is harmful to humans' health. It affects smokers and people living around. Therefore, many countries proposed a law that prevents smoking in all public places (really? which country?). In my opinion, smoking should not be banned in all public. There are a few reasons to support my statement.

Although smoking is harmful to our health, it still has advantages for us. Firstly, pressure from working and family will make people depressed, but cigarette seems to give a better way of solution. Thereafter, Smoking is a good way to remove pressure. I do not think non-smokers who like snack, junk food or high calories food are healthier than smokers. On the other hand, cigarettes are also helpful when we communicate with other people in the society. It is easier to talk to them when you handle them a cigarette. Everyone has the right to keep his or her habit such as smoking.

In “2007 Chinese finance", the author claimed that more than 20 percents of the Chinese annual financial revenue are from the taxes paid by cigarette-making companies. Hence, the tobacco businesses become an important way of earning revenue for China. Therefore if we ban smoking in all public places, it will bring us many problems. I will give some examples. Firstly, many workers would be laid off due to the reason that cigarette companies won't sell enough products they expected . Many people will lose jobs and it will create new social problems. Secondly, Chinese government will collect a fewer taxes compared with it when smoking is not banned.Therefore the government won't have enough money to help poor people or construct cities.

Generally, I want to say that banning smoking in all public places is not a good idea. My suggestion is that smoking should be banned in places such as bus station, train station and supermarket. And we should provide more spots for smokers.

只给你改了语法错误还有很多啰嗦的地方。 但是你的逻辑思维有很大问题。 需要找很多实际的例子来支持你的观点。 其实吸烟很不好, 况且我不认为中国的收入都是来自烟草, 而且目前吸烟也没有不合法, rape现在中国都不管, 吸烟他还管吗?
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第1个回答  2009-07-23
and Cigarettes provide pleasure to smoker
改为:Cigarettes provide a way to relieve those from smokers
第2个回答  2009-07-23
A vast number of people enjoy smoking. Not only the eldery and adults, but students have also picked up the habit. However, smoking is harfmul to one's health, whether you are a smoker or not. Therefore, many countries want to ban smoking in public places. In my opinion, however, smoking should not be banned in all public places. I believe this for several reasons; although smoking is harmful to our bodies, it does have some advantages. Nowadays, increasing pressure and stress causes depression and anxiety - cigarettes are often smoked to relieve the smoker of this stress.
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