求老师帮看一下，这篇英语作文，有什么什么语法错误，或建议， Last weekend I had

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求老师帮看一下，这篇英语作文，有什么什么语法错误，或建议， Last weekend I had a pleasant trip with my friends .Early morning. we rode our bikes to the north hill park. On the way we were so excited about our tirp. We went climbing as soon as we arrived there. When we climed to the top of the hill. We started to picnic. Later some girl danced under the trees and some boys played games happily. The hill is full of happiness. We didnt leave until the evening. It was a great experience, I was pleased with the pleasant tirp 谢谢

Answer 1

问题比较多。第二行，应为“In the early morning,”morning后应为逗号，另north hill park是专有名词的话应首字母大写，“so excited”最好改为“very excited”；第三行，the top of the hill后应为逗号，we应小写；第四行，girl应该为girls，两个动作也最好改为过去进行时，用were dancing和were playing，The hill is full of中的is 应该为was。第五行，experience和I之间必须要有个and，逗号可要可不要。追问

谢谢

Answer 2

没什么问题 30分的话18 19 没问题了
老师要是判高点 21 22 也有可能追问

怎么在稍微提高一下档次

是根据表格里的要求写的

追答

那就没问题。