语法没甚麽错，但读起来有点繁复..... 第一段我会修改为：
Today I'll introduce my favourite English song -- See You Again, sang by famous American singer Wiz Khalifa and Charlie Puth. I'm sure that most of you might have listened to it already.
中段提到"movie"有点突然，因为前面一直没有提过它是电影配乐 (虽然大部分人都应该知道，但前文後理还是说一说吧)，所以我觉得把次序调一调比较好：
Just in case you don't know - the song is from the movie "Furious 7" . Although I haven't seen the movie before, I'm still deeply moved by the singers' voice. And the reason why I love it so much is that every single time I hear the melody, it always remind me of a scene, which two old friends saying hello to each others after long time no see.
最後一段的两句我觉得语意表达得不太清楚，可以说说你想表达的内容吗？
Today I'll introduce my favourite English song -- See You Again, sang by famous American singer Wiz Khalifa and Charlie Puth. I'm sure that most of you might have listened to it already.
中段提到"movie"有点突然，因为前面一直没有提过它是电影配乐 (虽然大部分人都应该知道，但前文後理还是说一说吧)，所以我觉得把次序调一调比较好：
Just in case you don't know - the song is from the movie "Furious 7" . Although I haven't seen the movie before, I'm still deeply moved by the singers' voice. And the reason why I love it so much is that every single time I hear the melody, it always remind me of a scene, which two old friends saying hello to each others after long time no see.
最後一段的两句我觉得语意表达得不太清楚，可以说说你想表达的内容吗？
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