求英语大神帮忙看看英语作文，感谢

Question

如图，有什么语法错误请指出来。还有最后一段的it was my childhood dream.....为什么是was？？这句话是机翻的，语法不很理解

Answer 1

1. playing football is my hobby,或者 my hobby is playing football.
2. what 做代词只能引导宾语从句，所以这里what不合适，改成 the following explains why .....
3. 从小就开始喜欢看足球比赛，have, since 引导的从句用过去时，主句用现在完成时。从句I have been fond of watching football matches on TV since I was a little child.
4.你作文的either of them很模糊，是强壮的对手让你兴奋吗？ 用strong opponents最好。
5，on my way to：在去往....的路上，后面接名词就好了，你又加个pursue，重复了。

Answer 2

第二句my hobby is playing。。。。
应该是IT is my dream to be a football player 因为这是你一直的梦想。
最后一句是on the way to doing sth 。