大家帮忙看一下有没有语法错误或用词错误,如果大家觉得哪里不好的就提出来,大家觉得有哪些东西是可以加上去的就提出来.谢谢!!
In my summer holiday. I read a book called <Harry Potter and the Death Hallows>. It’s the ending of Harry Potter series. Harry Potter series is famous in the world. Its writer is J.K. Rowlin. This book tells a long, exciting story.
Dumbledore was killed. Harry, Ron and Hermione must find Voldmort’s 5 Horcruxes and destroy them. A lot of Death Eaters hid near their houses and their school, so they had to run away from home. Voldmort wanted to kill Harry. He invaded Hogwards. The battle of Hogwards broke out. Everybody came to protect Hogwards. At last, Harry defeated Voldmort and got 3 Death Hallows. From here, he lived happily.
The story is terrific. The writer designed this story with great care, I think. In fact, there’s some hint of this story in other Harry Potter books. Things in the story are convincing, although there’re not true. A lot of special things appeared in the story, for example: Betie Botts Beans, they taste very strange’ and chocolate frog, can you believe that a frog that was made of chocolate can be eaten? It also has some special activities, like Quiddich, it’s a game that people played on a broom; Triwizard Tourament, it’s a competition between 3 magic schools. You see, the story just like another world, a magical world. This attracts people very much!
Not only the special things and activities, but the people in the story also attract us. Harry Potter and Ron and Hermione are leads in the story. They were brave and they were very good friends. J.K. Rowlin designed them very delicate. The description of the people in the story is vivid and vigorous. In the story, something were about people’s morality. Including the battle of justice and evil, bad people repented. So, this story just likes the mirror of our true life. Don’t you think it’s very close to our life?
A lot of people were deeply moved after reading this book. I think the most unforgettable scene is the battle of Hogwards. When Voldmort asked where was Harry, nobody sold Harry. No matter Ravenclaw, Hufflepuff or Gryffindor students, they all came to protect Hogwards. The ghost, and the students who had already finished school came to help them, too. From this scene, it embodied their unite and bravery. They didn’t afraid of deat, they put the death entirely out of their mind. This spirit is very noble. Not only this chapter, a lot of details also told a little moving story like this.
So, according to me, I think this book is very good for our teenager. It’s not just a simple story, it teaches us how to face difficulty and how to defeat difficulty. I’m benefited a great deal from this <Harry Potter and the Death Hallows>. I hope everyone can read this book if he or she likes.
I like this book very much.
你们把哪里修改了的地方写出来吧......谢谢